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Wednesday, May 23, 2007

Computers-Draft one

Computers are playing an important role in our daily life. It is convenient for us to use the work of our washing machines and air conditioner makes us comfortable in hot days. In addition, being used at homes, computers are also used in business, transportation, education, researches and many other fields. In conclusion, Without computers, this world would simply be unimaginable.

Personally, I have a liking for computers. First, it is easy for us to deal with any information without the limitation of space or time. Second, we can make different country friends. Third, we can have fun, in particular, it makes us play games, watch films and surf the net, and so on. To be sure, the personal computer has become a very good companion we can't do without.

6 Comments:

Blogger All Blog Spots said...

nice blog

3:36 AM  
Blogger 飛奇 said...

大致上應該沒啥錯誤了吧~~??(我來過了)

6:58 AM  
Blogger 平井" said...

1.It is convenient for us to use the work of our washing machines and air conditioner [makes us comfortable in hot days.]
我覺得分開比較好-->...and air conditioner. It makes us comfortable in hot days.

2. In conclusion, Without computers, this world would simply be unimaginable.
w要小寫
In conclusion, this world would simply be unimaginable while without computers.我覺得位子對調一下比較好

寫的不錯喔!!

7:53 AM  
Blogger 郭包子 said...

結尾寫的真是有力!
你好棒哦~
(平井都寫了那麼多…我很混嗎?
 喂喂~我有看完好嗎?!)

8:26 AM  
Blogger :V,瀞 ”婷* said...

this world would be unimaginable simply.

without (it).

8:24 AM  
Blogger 飛飛飛 said...

* In conclusion, Without computers, this world would simply be unimaginable. >> "w" 要小寫 !

8:41 PM  

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