Autoiography-1-Draft one
My name is Yu-Fang Huang. I was born in Tainan city. There are four people in my family. My father is a simple and responsible person. My mother, a housewife, does the cooking very well. My parents couldn’t teach strictly for me. So I can determine anything what I want except for villainy. My brother is a college student. He lives in Taipei now. Although my family is not special, they always make me happy every day.
I like to do exercise, like playing basketball and going swimming and so on. I sometimes play basketball with my friends in the nearby park on weekend. These exercises not only make you keep staying healthy also losing weights. Besides, I also like to watch TV about movie channels and listen to music including English songs. Because they are not only for fun but help your listening and speaking become better. Therefore, doing exercise and listening to music is my favorite hobby.
posted by GIGI @ 6:33 AM
4 Comments:
like playing basketball and going swimming and so on.
把basketball and going 這ㄍand去掉改成，
These exercises not only make you keep staying healthy also losing weights.
主詞用 I 會比較好
become better
，，不要become 直接 better就好了
doing exercise and listening to music is my favorite habbit.
是are ， hobbies
My father is a simple and responsible person.
→ a simple 加 and 在那裡，會有種
My father is a simple "person" and responsible person.
I like to do exercise, like playing basketball "and" going swimming and so on.
→and去掉
These exercises not only make you keep staying healthy also losing weights.
Because they are not only for fun but help your listening and speaking become better.
這兩句用第一人稱me,my會比較好
第二段"I sometimes play basketball with my friends in the nearby park on weekend. "
最後那裏不太對,看是要寫on the weekend或是on weekends~~
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