A Dream I Had - Draft One
I had a strange and wonderful dream several weeks ago. In my dream, I opened a mysterious book unwittingly, getting the amazing magic power. The wizardry enabled me to fly in the sky and to pass through the time. Furthermore, it also gave me three wishes what I wanted. But I had to obey the book’s direction to rule the world. It was difficult for me to make the decision. When I was considering its demands, an unknown man appeared. He told me that the book was embodiment of the evil. If I promised him, I would be cursed and my soul would be its slave forever. Even so, I still responded the evil owing to three wishes. From then on, I never awaked until a handsome prince defeated the evil and saved me with a kiss. Soon, we fell in love and I consented to get married to him. From then on, we led a happy life in the castle. Dreams can not only make us give the rein to our imagination but also experience a variety of dreamland. Therefore, I like to have dreams except for nightmares!

4 Comments:
, getting the amazing magic power喔喔!這我知道 因為省略and 所以get要加ing對不對?!
it also gave me three wishes what I wanted.這裡的關代要用what哦?which呢??
哇喔~好像童話!(寫那麼多…很累耶)
"The wizardry enabled me to fly in the sky and to pass through the time."
我覺得to一個就夠了~~
你後半段用了兩個from then on
也許其中一個可以用其他的如after that代替
結局真美好啊...
I had a strange and wonderful dream several weeks ago. In my dream,
我覺得用but當連接詞比較好
兩個from then on 很贅
金龍明明說不用打這麼多的
你讓我好愧疚
When I was ..
→可以改 I considering..
寫的很好~!!
very good
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